Six Sentence Sunday May 13, 2012
Hello again,
HAPPY MOTHER'S DAY!
Here are Six more sentences from my contemporary romance which is still under the working title "How Long Does it Take (to fall out of love)?" It is slated for publication September 22, 2012.
This scene takes place right after the second explosion at the plastics plant. The two friends, Liz and Veronica, were having lunch at a sidewalk cafe not too far away. They had just leapt to their feet to see what they could see after the first explosion. Then the second one occurred. Liz is the narrator:
My head grazed a table as I
fell. I sensed the concrete rushing up
to meet me, but there was no pain; instead, silence engulfed me like deep
water. Everything slowed. After a moment, I became aware that my knees
were bleeding inside my new white Capri’s; spackles of blood were seeping through. That’s when I spotted Ronnie crawling across the blistered sidewalk
toward me. Her face was dotted with red
like a Botox-party nightmare.
That's it for today! Hope you enjoyed it. See ya next Sunday. If you would like to participate in Six Sentence Sunday, or if you would like to read other author's excerpts, go to http://www.sixsunday.com/
20 comments:
Oooh...Ann...you know how I like my tragedies, but poor thing. I hope she's okay. As always, great job of putting us into the scene.
I like how you show the sound of the explosion through silence. Intense emotions in your imagery.
Interesting that she'd notice her pants rather than any other part of her body that may be bleeding. Nice six! :)
Thanks, Carmen...I don't want to spoil anything, but she won't be okay for a long, long time.
Thanks, Candice. So glad you said that...it was just what I was aiming for. =)
Isn't it though...wonder why that would be? Shock, perhaps?
Great description of a scary scene. I love all the little details--specks of blood on her white capris--and the botox party gone wrong is genius!
eww...a botox party. I wonder what they've been up to? Great excerpt
Those factory explosions can be nasty--and the long-term effects can be even worse. No telling what kind of toxic chemicals were released.
Again you really plunge us right into the disaster, very well described. Still leaves me wanting to know more - effective excerpt!
'Botox-party nightmare' is awesome! Fantastic description! Great six!
Thanks...I think I need some Botox...squinting at this screen is making me old!
Good! More to come...thanks so much!
Isn't that the truth...thank you for stopping by!
Thanks, Susan. Glad you stopped by!
Thanks, Sandy...you just made my day!
Love.it. !! Love u 2 Mom! Love this story!
"Her face was dotted with red like a Botox-party nightmare." What a visual! Love it!
Thank you, sweetie. Love you 2. (and your novel as well...can't wait to see Charlotte and Sanderson in print wheeee).
Thank you, Karen. I appreciate that!
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