Sunday, May 13, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday May 13, 2012

Hello again,

HAPPY MOTHER'S DAY!  

Here are Six more sentences from my contemporary romance which is still under the working title "How Long Does it Take (to fall out of love)?" It is slated for publication September 22, 2012.  

This scene takes place right after the second explosion at the plastics plant.  The two friends, Liz and Veronica, were having lunch at a sidewalk cafe not too far away.  They had just leapt to their feet to see what they could see after the first explosion.  Then the second one occurred.  Liz is the narrator:



My head grazed a table as I fell.  I sensed the concrete rushing up to meet me, but there was no pain; instead, silence engulfed me like deep water.  Everything slowed.  After a moment, I became aware that my knees were bleeding inside my new white Capri’s; spackles of blood were seeping through.  That’s when I spotted Ronnie crawling across the blistered sidewalk toward me.  Her face was dotted with red like a Botox-party nightmare. 


That's it for today!  Hope you enjoyed it.  See ya next Sunday.  If you would like to participate in Six Sentence Sunday, or if you would like to read other author's excerpts, go to http://www.sixsunday.com/




20 comments:

Carmen DeSousa said...

Oooh...Ann...you know how I like my tragedies, but poor thing. I hope she's okay. As always, great job of putting us into the scene.

Candice Bundy said...

I like how you show the sound of the explosion through silence. Intense emotions in your imagery.

Jessica E. Subject said...

Interesting that she'd notice her pants rather than any other part of her body that may be bleeding. Nice six! :)

Ann Swann said...

Thanks, Carmen...I don't want to spoil anything, but she won't be okay for a long, long time.

Ann Swann said...

Thanks, Candice. So glad you said that...it was just what I was aiming for. =)

Ann Swann said...

Isn't it though...wonder why that would be? Shock, perhaps?

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Great description of a scary scene. I love all the little details--specks of blood on her white capris--and the botox party gone wrong is genius!

Unknown said...

eww...a botox party. I wonder what they've been up to? Great excerpt

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Those factory explosions can be nasty--and the long-term effects can be even worse. No telling what kind of toxic chemicals were released.

Veronica Scott said...

Again you really plunge us right into the disaster, very well described. Still leaves me wanting to know more - effective excerpt!

Anonymous said...

'Botox-party nightmare' is awesome! Fantastic description! Great six!

Ann Swann said...

Thanks...I think I need some Botox...squinting at this screen is making me old!

Ann Swann said...

Good! More to come...thanks so much!

Ann Swann said...

Isn't that the truth...thank you for stopping by!

Ann Swann said...

Thanks, Susan. Glad you stopped by!

Ann Swann said...

Thanks, Sandy...you just made my day!

Sara Harris said...

Love.it. !! Love u 2 Mom! Love this story!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

"Her face was dotted with red like a Botox-party nightmare." What a visual! Love it!

Ann Swann said...

Thank you, sweetie. Love you 2. (and your novel as well...can't wait to see Charlotte and Sanderson in print wheeee).

Ann Swann said...

Thank you, Karen. I appreciate that!