Sunday, June 9, 2013

Stevie-girl and the Phantom of Crybaby Bridge

Hello Weekend Writing Warriors ~ since Stutter Creek has been released ~ and since I've already published two whole chapters on the 8 Sentence Sundays, I decided to change horses and put up a few lines from Book Three of The Phantom Series: Stevie-girl and the Phantom of Crybaby Bridge, which should be out later this month.  This series is told from Stevie's POV.  Below is the set up:

Isn’t Algebra hard enough, do we seriously have to disentangle the spirit world, too?

Stevie-girl and her best friend, Jase, are phantom magnets. 
Whenever they are together, the doorway between this world and the next seems to swing slightly open.

When his parents treat them to a camping trip to New Mexico, the two friends can’t wait to visit the legendary Crybaby Bridge.  Right away, they hear the crying baby . . . but is it really a phantom, or is someone playing tricks on them?

When they first arrive at the campsite, they are sent in search of makings for a campfire.  But the lure of the bridge is strong, so the two friends hurry down for a quick peek...

             "C'mon," Jase said. "We'd better find some stones for the campfire."
             As we turned to leave, a chill wind tore across the bridge and flung dirt and leaf debris directly into our faces.  We dropped hands and rubbed our eyes in disbelief. 

            Jase muttered, “What the heck was that?”
            I rubbed my vision clear and gazed into the gathering gloom at the opposite end of the bridge.  The wind whistled and whirled around our ankles like dusty water.
            Something doesn't want us here, I thought.   

Okay, that's all today.  Don't forget to visit all the other authors at #WeWriWa

Afterthought: Next week, cover reveal for Stevie-girl and the Phantom of Crybaby Bridge!


  1. I love your title and the excerpt is full of movement and tension. Very good :)

    1. Thanks so much, Wendy. The title is so long, I wasn't sure if I should cut I really appreciate your comment. I didn't find you on WeWriWa's list or I would check out your snippet. Maybe next week. =)

  2. This is a little bit scary.

  3. Frightening situation! Looking forward to the next excerpt.

  4. Very curious snippet and ominous last line!

  5. That's all it would take for me to run! Exciting snippet.

  6. Now that is spooky indeed! Terrific snippet!

  7. Wow! Really tense and good :) Great 8 :)

  8. Nice ominous feel to the setting.

  9. Creepy good. Love a good ghost tale. I'd be worried about what is at the other end of that bridge, but I expect curiosity will get the better of them.
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