Welcome to the last #WeWriWa blog entry from STUTTER CREEK before it's June 1st release! Be sure to enter the giveaway on the sidebar...
This scene is continued from last week in which Beth and John finally rediscover each other:
Silence surrounded them. Even the birds seemed to be intensely waiting.
In the heightened atmosphere, Beth could feel each ray of sunshine on her skin; she could hear each leaf that floated, soft as a raindrop, to the forest floor. It was like suspended animation, this feeling. She hoped it would never end.
He glanced down at her hand
stroking Turk’s rough head. He wasn’t
really surprised that Turk had taken to her so readily. She had quite a way with animals, as he
recalled.
Okay, folks, that's it for this week...hope to see your name on the winners list for the giveaway which ends June 3rd. Don't forget to visit the other Weekend Writing Warriors wewriwa.com
Afterthought: It was such a wonderful evening with my three little grandsons, and then we had rain, actual rain, falling from the sky. Will wonders never cease???
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34 comments:
There is a bit of tension here. Can they really turn around each other and leave it as that?
I love this! I feel like i'm really there in the scene and you really brought me in with the sensory description!
Congratulations on the coming release. I'm glad they finally found each other.
I love the way you described her hypersensitivity to her surroundings. This book sounds intriguing. I'll have to get a copy when it releases.
Agree with Linda - lots of tension in such few words. Nicely done. Good #8Sentence.
A lovely peaceful scene there.
Good question!
Thanks so much, Susan.
Ahh, Stevie, I have a character in another book series by the name of Stevie! Thanks for stopping by...
Thank you, Lauren. I love a good forest scene. =)
Thanks, Denise, I appreciate that.
Thank you, Elaine. Me, too!
Beautiful eight, Ann!
Thanks, Kate. =)
I LOVED the description, the "suspended animation" as you termed it! Terrific snippet and best wishes on the Release of the book!
Love it--and have entered the GR contest! Fingers crossed. And have fun with the release!
Thanks, Veronica!
Ohh, thank you, Karysa. I hope you win!
Interesting that she is so enjoying this moment of "suspended animation" - is it because she wants to hold on to every part of this experience, or because she would rather stretch out the present and avoid the future? Side note, your jump to his POV pulled me out of the moment and out of the story.
Captivating scene description here - I'm pulled in! So excited for you and your upcoming release! May you be showered with rave reviews!!
Thanks, hope we caught that in rewrites...
Beautiful imagery! I was right there with you, loved it!
Seems like the entire forest leaned in to watch and listen. Nice snippet.
So kind of you, Gemma!
Thank you, Sharon. I like the way you said that. =)
"each ray of sunshine on her skin; she could hear each leaf that floated,"
Wonderful imagery. Very nice.
"each ray of sunshine on her skin; she could hear each leaf that floated,"
Wonderful imagery. Very nice.
Savoring the moment as neither seem to know what will happen next. I like it! Wishing you much success with your release.
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Thank you so much, Cindy!
Great build-up. Each of the descriptions sets the scene and heightens the anticipation for whatever is coming next. Well done.
I am finding it very hard to wait for the ending of this story. A real attention-grabber! Very well written.
Your descriptions are just stunning. It was like I was there. The only thing I would say to watch out for is the POV shift was a bit jarring.
Thanks, it goes on sale June 1st. =)
You are such a dear~thank you for the kind comments, and yes, POV shift is my worst enemy. I'm hoping the editor caught this one before final proofing, but I'm sort of afraid to look!
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