Hi folks,
We're still taking snippets from STUTTER CREEK, my romantic suspense novel coming out June 1st.
Last week, Beth talked about how the women in her family were sometimes visited by loved ones who had passed on. This week, I jumped us forward just a bit, to see if Beth had inherited this trait. This scene comes after yet another sleepless night.
Beth was so exhausted she never even
noticed the tiny dots of color that darted here and there around the room. There were dozens of pinpricks of light,
every hue and color of the rainbow. Gradually
coalescing, they swarmed around her gently, like a delicate diaphanous shawl. Maybe she didn’t see them, but perhaps she
sensed them because when she closed her eyes, she finally slipped back into sleep,
peacefully.
Sunlight
woke her the second time.
She
was lying in the center of her daughter Abby’s soft bed just like she’d done almost every
night since the elopement. Though she was
certain she had retreated to the recliner at one point, it seemed as if it was
growing more and more difficult to tell the dreams from the waking.
She had to get out, go somewhere . . .
22 comments:
Very nice. I've been thinking about a storyline where the othe side bleeds into the waking world but this is one genre of fiction I can't seem to make work for me. Great 8.
Love this, beautifully written with great descriptions!
Oddly enough, some of these "bleed throughs" were taken from my own life.
Oh, you are such a dear. Thank you so much. =)
What an absolutely gorgeous description! And the emotion portrayed in such a simple manner. Wonderful!
Out of this world description! I've had the experience. She's coming to an epiphany. Super eight, writing just beautiful, Ann.
Awesome eight! Love your poetic descriptions :-)
It sounds to me as if she can make contact with the other side. Nice excerpt.
Thanks, Elaine. =)
Thank you very much!
I'm so glad you can relate! Thank you for the lovely words...I may have to just frame them!
What a sweet thing to say. You've made my day, Virginia!
Wow, I was mesmerized by the colorful little lights, wish she could have seen them! This story is so fascinating...another excellent excerpt!
Thank you, Veronica. Maybe she will see them yet!
I know this is awfully specific, but sentence #3 was very beautiful. And I also got a quick sense of what is going on, which is often difficult to convey in such a short piece. For me, you didn't even need the intro. The snippet speaks for itself.
Beautiful writing.
Thank you, Daniel!
Aww, thanks, Sue Ann.
Great description, and the snippet really made me feel Beth's turmoil. I'll be back next Sunday!
~Joyce Scarbrough
Great description, and the snippet really made me feel Beth's turmoil. I'll definitely be back next Sunday!
~Joyce Scarbrough
Thanks, Joyce!
This is an intriguing snippet, Ann. I can hardly wait to read this one! :-)
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