Saturday, June 23, 2012

6 Sentence Sunday June 24, 2012

Hello and welcome to another 6 Sentence Snippet.  This one comes from The Phantom Student which will be released any day now from Cool Well Press.

In this scene, the new student, Derol Pavey, has just sat down in the outdoor seating area for lunch.  Everyone knows Derol has Tourette Syndrome.  He inadvertently created quite a stir in homeroom.  Now some of the kids are hoping for a repeat.  As always, Stevie-girl is the narrator:


             He must have sensed me staring because he glanced up and caught my eye.  I smiled tentatively.  He ducked his head and took a huge bite of ham and cheese.
            Suddenly, the sound of slinky laughter rode the brilliant fall breeze and settled over us like chain mail, bright and cold. 
             Derol's leg began to jiggle madly and it seemed as if the bite of sandwich he’d taken was stuck in his throat.  
             Jase and Billy Bob were as still as death beside me.  

Okay, that's all this time.  Hope you enjoyed it.  The book will be out any day now.  More next week.  And don't forget to check out other snippets here: http://www.sixsunday.com/  

           

15 comments:

  1. I liked the "slinky laughter" description...really a well done six!

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  2. Suddenly, the sound of slinky laughter rode the brilliant fall breeze and settled over us like chain mail, bright and cold.

    That is one awesome sentence! Great six, Ann!

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  3. Great description, especially the laughter.

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  4. Very engaging and suspenseful. I would love to read more of this surely great story. I really like the descriptors in this it really makes you feel what the narrator is feeling. :)

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  5. This is going to be a great book - great six Ann!

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    1. Thanks, everyone. I really appreciate the comments =)

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  6. Nicely done -- some terrific description here! =D

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  7. Oh, so many questions formed in my mind, Ann. Is Derol the phantom student? Will he unleash another helping of Tourette's? And it has a sense of bullying possibility, too. Stevie girl is kind--just a few words and that came through nicely. Great six. :-) Congrats on the book release!

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    1. Thanks, you guys. No, Derol isn't the phantom ... but it isn't a coincidence that they appear about the same time =)

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  8. Oooooh! Coming out soon you say? Hmmm..... I love untraditional characters. Will have to keep my eyes peeled. Another brilliant 6!

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  9. I love your description of the laughter riding the fall breeze! Great 6!

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  10. Nice view of the interaction among high schoolers when they are presented with someone different.

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