Saturday, February 16, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors ~ Stutter Creek ~ Next 8


    
 Hi everyone ~
Here are the next 8 sentences in my upcoming      romantic thriller, Stutter Creek.  It is slated for release on June 1, 2013

Following her father’s death and the collapse of her marriage, Beth retreats to the family cabin at Stutter Creek where she stumbles across the path of a serial killer and winds up fighting to stay alive.

Last week, while on her way to work the evening shift at the Water House Bar & Grill, Mandy spied a small boy standing beside the road.  She immediately slowed down to pull over and check on him.  This is where we pick up the story:
    
      The setting sun made the trees appear as black-paper cutouts in a landscape collage.
     After checking her mirrors to make sure no one was behind her, Mandy pressed the button to lower the passenger-side window.
            It was almost all the way down when a man yanked open the door and exploded into her world like a tornado into a trailer park.  Her hand flew to the gearshift, but she couldn’t engage it.  Even as her flight instinct kicked in, part of her mind was telling her this was almost certainly the same strange guy who had requested her section at the restaurant the night before.  His eyes had seemed to follow her all around the crowded dining room, and his oily stench had made him stand out like a spot of mold on white linen. 
            Mandy drew in breath to scream, her hand scrambling across the console for her phone or the gearshift, whichever came first, but he was too fast.  With lightning speed, he dove across the seat and slapped a rectangle of duct tape across her mouth.

AfterthoughtI hope you enjoyed today's snippet.  Be sure to check out the other author's at the main website:
 
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21 comments:

  1. Oh dear! Poor girl. I wonder how she's going to get out of this.

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  2. Chilling. Something like this could happen to anyone.

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  3. Chilling. This could happen to anyone.

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  4. Wow, an explosive excerpt! Very tense, definitely makes me want to keep reading...I liked the tornado in a trailer park analogy. Excellent excerpt!

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  5. Powerful description in this eight, Ann. Thanks.

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  6. That's why we never stop ... never never never. Come on Mandy!!! Love this 8, Mom! Heck, love this whole story!! Def. something to be read on a windy, rainy night when you're alone in the house .. or so you think ...

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  7. Terrific use of detail to launch into the tension -- gripping!

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  8. Love the first line, "The setting sun made the trees appear as black-paper cutouts in a landscape collage." So peaceful, then BAM! I'm as shocked as the character.
    This poor woman - her father dies, she gets divorced, and now a serial killer is after her? I hope she gets a break soon!

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    1. Oh, I'm so glad you were shocked, too! But this isn't Beth, the main character, this is Mandy, the first victim. I need to correct that confusion, thank you!

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  9. Great excerpt! Very scary in how close to reality this can be.

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  10. Excellent! Very creepy and great use of words and analogies to show us the scene. Love a good thriller!

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  11. I barely had time to breathe. Very tense!

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  12. I wouldn't say I enjoyed it exactly. But I did want to jump into the scene with baseball bat and take him out while she ran for it. Is that close enough?

    I'm a wimp. I don't like being scared.

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  13. Thanks ladies, I don't know why my reply button won't function all of a sudden. But I'm glad you found it cringe-worthy. That makes my day! LOL

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  14. WOW! You had me at that first beautiful sentence. Amazing description and tension-building...so creepy!

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    1. Aww, thanks so much. May I just frame your comment and hang it around my neck?

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